Talk:2000 Atlantic hurricane season/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 15:46, 12 July 2012 (UTC)

• First, has everything been addressed from the previous GAN?
  • Pretty much everything from the last GAN was fixed.--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
• There needs to be a better source for the opening sentence, since there should be no HURDAT referencing for a record like that.
• Debatable if Leslie "minimally effected land areas".
  • It did result in a tropical storm watch for Bermuda, but other than that, no effects were felt on land (while it was tropical, anyway). Should I change it to no impact at all?--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
    • Well, you devote a lot of time to it in the 2nd lede paragraph, so it's just weird. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 18:47, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
• You should make an indication somewhere via a note that all damage totals are in 2000 USD. It gets repetitive.
• "However, the precursor to Tropical Storm Leslie" - how is that contradicting the previous statement? I'm not sure "however" is appropriate.
  • Fixed--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
• Were Beryl and Debby active at the same time? If not, you shouldn't use "while" as a connector.
  • Fixed--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
• The table in "season summary" should indicate that it does not include the subtropical storm.
• "However, La Niña was present it the Eastern Pacific, which was a factor in the activity in the season. " - again, not sure if "however" is appropriate.
• "Tropical cyclogenesis began in the month of June" - sort of an awkward sentence. I think "first occurred" would be better than "began"
  • Fixed--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
• " Following an active October, no tropical cyclogenesis occurred in the final month of the season, which is November" - I'd swap "November" and "final month of the season"
  • Fixed--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
• Was the ACE above normal like the season?
• "However, it quickly re-strengthened" - the antecedent is unclear, since the subject of the previous sentence is the upper-level low (this is in Alberto's section)
• Why don't you mention the final dissipation of Alberto? And is the date in the mini-infobox the actual dissipation date of the low or when it became extratropical?
  • Because it is right there in the sentence before. Also, June 23 is when it became extratropical.--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
• You never say in prose when TD 4 was classified/developed.
  • Fixed--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
• Given that ref 9 is in Mexican pesos, you should probably list the initial damage total for Beryl in pesos followed by USD in parenthesis. Maybe also indicate the website where it was converted in a note?
• "the system began Tropical Depression Six" - word-o?
  • Fixed--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
• You should mention that Chris was a TS for only six hours.
  • Fixed--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
• "As a result, the system likely became Tropical Depression Seven at 1800 UTC on that same day" - huh? TD 7 is the label that the NHC gave it, so "likely" is a poor choice of word.
  • Fixed--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
• I think the bit about Debby potentially being a major hurricane hitting Florida should be mentioned, possible Andrew redux
  • Fixed--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
• "Tropical Depression Nine developed on September 9 from an interaction between a low-level trough and a cluster of convection associated with a tropical wave in the Gulf of Mexico. A disorganized low-level center developed 185 miles (295 km) south of Lake Charles, Louisiana on September 8, forming a tropical depression." - you mention "tropical depression" developing/forming twice in two sentences. Try cutting down on the redundancy.
  • Fixed--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
• "It spawned a low pressure area that gradually developing" - grammar
  • Fixed--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
• "325 miles (523 km)" - why no rounding for km? (Florence)
  • It was in a conversion template--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
• Two consecutive sentences mention "rapidly" in Florence's section. Try cutting down.
  • I fixed the one about it rapidly intensifying, as I doubt it would qualify as "rapid".--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
• "A combination of north-northwesterly shear and lower sea surface temperatures, it again weakened on September 13 and was downgraded back to a tropical storm." - missing verb in the first half
  • Fixed--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
• "After moving erratically for almost five days, a short-wave trough caused" - did the trough move erratically for five days?
  • Fixed--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
• "At least 65 homes and businesses were flooded, while numerous coastal roads, including Bayshore Boulevard and the Courtney Campbell Causeway, were caused due to water inundation" - should that be "were closed?"
  • Oops--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
• "damaged two condominiums and at least 24 houses" - you need number consistency whether you spell or not
  • Fixed--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
• Damage total for Gordon?
  • $10.8 million--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
• "A somewhat organized tropical wave" - please fix :P
  • Better?--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
• When did Isaac affect the UK? That'd be better than "eventually"
  • Between October 3 and October 4, 2000--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
• What were Keith's peak winds? It's never said in prose.
• "and at least 300 people were affected by flooding in that country" - what does it mean to be affected by flooding? Had to evacuate? Had their commute disrupted?
• Is the exact rainfall total in Belize known?
  • There was a reported of 32.67 inches (830 mm) of rain in Belize City, which I added.--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
• "In Belize, a village reported that only 12 houses remained" - remained what? And what village?
  • It means that only 12 houses survived the storm, but as for the name of the village, the answer is: "Nope, Chuck Testa!".--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
• "At least 19 people were killed in Belize and damages totaled to $280 million (2000 USD)." - you don't need the "to" in "damaged to"
  • Fixed--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
• Same as with Beryl, you should list the original damage source in pesos before the USD, and say how you converted it.
• "In slowly organized" - fix?
  • Fixed--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
• "with 40,000 acres (160 km²) of farmland inundated with water" - try to avoid two "with"s
  • Fixed--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
• "Overall, the precursor system of Leslie resulted in about $950 million (2000 USD) in damage, slightly more than half of that figure was agriculture related." - there's a missing conjunction for the last clause
  • What?--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
• "The low pressure area slowly formed a circulation" - I thought a LPA was a circulation?
• " satellite classifications using the Hebert-Poteat technique" - what is that?
• "though initially it was erroneously classified as Tropical Depression Seventeen" - why erroneously?
  • Because when Michael became tropical, it was immediately a tropical storm, and not a depression.--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)
• "In mid-October 2000" - we know the year
  • Hmm, do I replace it with Y2K?--12george1 (talk) 17:49, 12 July 2012 (UTC)

That's it for now. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 15:46, 12 July 2012 (UTC)