Talk:2/5th Battalion (Australia)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Anotherclown (talk · contribs) 00:46, 20 January 2016 (UTC)

Progression

• Version of the article when originally reviewed: [1]
• Version of the article when review was closed: [2]

Technical review

• Citations: The Citation Check tool reveals no issues with reference consolidation (no action req'd)
• Disambiguations: no dab links [3] (no action req'd).
• Linkrot: no dead links [4] (no action req'd)
• Alt text: images have alt text [5] (no action req'd).
• Copyright violations: The Earwig Tool reveals no issues with copyright violations or close paraphrasing (seems to be picking up combinations of proper nouns and common words which cannot be avoided) [6] (no action req'd).
• Duplicate links: no duplicate links to be removed (no action req'd).

Criteria

• It is reasonably well written.

  a (prose): b (MoS):

  • Perhaps mention Crete in the lead?
  • This sentence seems a bit awkward: "Following the outbreak of World War II on 3 September 1939, due to the provisions of the Defence Act which precluded sending Australia's part-time military forces overseas, the Australian government announced the decision to raise the all volunteer Second Australian Imperial Force for service overseas." I'd suggestion flipping it around, for instance: "Following the outbreak of World War II on 3 September 1939, the Australian government announced the decision to raise the all volunteer Second Australian Imperial Force for service overseas, due to the provisions of the Defence Act which precluded sending Australia's part-time military forces overseas." Also the use of "overseas" twice in the same sentence is a little repetitive - perhaps reword one?
  • Prose is a little repetitive here: "...before the battalion went into battle, as Cook was considered too old to lead troops in battle..." ("into battle" and "in battle")
  • "...the bridgehead that had been established towards the switchline..." I'm a bit unclear on what a "switchline" is? Is it part of a railway or is it another name for a control measure (for instance a phase line or a forward passage of lines)? If its the former perhaps just write something like "railway switchline" (assuming that is correct usage).
  • "...although in the end the Australians were unable to stem the tide of the German onslaught..." The British and New Zealanders were there too.
  • Repetitive prose here: "...to provide reinforcements, providing..." (provide and providing) and here "...ordered to return to Australia following a request by the Australian government for the return..." (return x 2, Australia and Australian - although this may be unavoidable)
  • Also repetitive here "...they were stationed on the island, during which time they were stationed..." (stationed x 2)
  • "Concentrating at Wondecla..." suggest instead "Concentrating at Wondecla on the Atherton Tablelands" for context. The way it is currently written it sounds like the concentrated at Wondecla then went to the Atherton Tablelands (and unless one knows where Wondecla is one wouldn't know otherwise).
  • The first sentence of this para (starting "concentrating at Wondecla") is also very long. Perhaps split?
  • "... the battalion was occupied with a series of amphibious exercises..." these were probably conducted more due to the expected nature of the battalion's future employment (i.e. Philippines etc) than to stave off boredom amongst the Diggers (which the current wording might perhaps seem to imply)
  • "Boarding the Duntroon on 24 November..." perhaps add 1944 here for clarity.
  • Is there a typo here? "proportionately heavily"
  • Wikilink Kalambaka, Kalamata, Alexandria, Crete, Damour River, Khalde, Beirut, SS Otranto, Galle Fort, Colombo, Shepparton, Tocumwal, Newcastle, Port Moresby, Wau, Lae, Nassau Bay, Tadji, Maprik,

• It is factually accurate and verifiable.

  a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

  • The article is well referenced to WP:RS and seems to reflect the sources available.
  • No issues with OR I could see.

• It is broad in its coverage.

  a (major aspects): b (focused):

  • Most major aspects of the topic seem to be sufficiently covered. A couple of minor points:
    • Perhaps mention the specialist platoons of headquarters company, and BHQ etc when discussing ORBAT?
    • "Following the end of the war the 2/5th remained in New Guinea until 1 December 1945". Does the Bn history indicate what they did during this time? Occupation duties etc?
      • Unfortunately Trigellis-Smith is very vague about this period in the battalion's life. I added a little bit more, but its not really a great improvement. AustralianRupert (talk) 14:08, 21 January 2016 (UTC)
  • Article is focused and uses an effective summary style.

• It follows the neutral point of view policy.

  a (fair representation): b (all significant views):

  • No issues here.

• It is stable.

  No edit wars etc.:

  • No issues here.

• It contains images, where possible, to illustrate the topic.

  a (tagged and captioned): b (Is illustrated with appropriate images): c (non-free images have fair use rationales): d public domain pictures appropriately demonstrate why they are public domain:

  • All images seem to be free / PD.
  • Captions look fine.
  • Perhaps consider cropping File:2-5th_Battalion_troops_in_action_around_Khalde_(AWM_photo_042172).jpg and File:Australian 2-5th Inf Bn Yamil July 1945 (AWM photo 093843).jpg to remove the white border?
  • In the caption "2/5th Battalion being addressed by Major General E.F Herring in Syria, November 1941" probably wikilink Herring

• Overall:

  a Pass/Fail:

  • Mostly just a few issues with prose to sort out (and a few suggestions like cropping the images etc), otherwise in good shape to me. Anotherclown (talk) 09:50, 21 January 2016 (UTC)
    • @Anotherclown: Thanks for taking the time to review this one. I think I've gotten everything now. Regards ,AustralianRupert (talk) 14:08, 21 January 2016 (UTC)
      • No worries, glad to. Happy with those changes. Passing now. Anotherclown (talk) 09:57, 22 January 2016 (UTC)