Talk:1995 European Grand Prix/GA2
Latest comment: 4 years ago by Lee Vilenski in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Epicgenius (talk · contribs) 16:36, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
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Infobox
editRain, later dried out, air temperature 11C (51F)
- Is it possible to use {{convert}} so the ° symbol shows up?- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:02, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
Prose, POV, and coverage
editLead
Damon Hill, Coulthard's teammate, started the race in second, but dropped down to third behind Schumacher at the start
- "at the start" sounds out of place here (in my opinion) since the word "start" is repeated at the beginning of the sentence, even though these refer to two different things. How about "in the opening lap"?- Agreed. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:17, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
Background
a late replacement for the cancelled Argentine Grand Prix.
- is this relevant to the article?- It's more that the race isn't in the same location as it was the previous year (Germany rather than Spain), and why it was held in Spain the previous year. It also changed from being a race towards the start of the season, to near the end. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:17, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
- I see. epicgenius (talk) 19:32, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
- It's more that the race isn't in the same location as it was the previous year (Germany rather than Spain), and why it was held in Spain the previous year. It also changed from being a race towards the start of the season, to near the end. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:17, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
the Japanese driver choosing not to race on doctors' advice
- it's not as obvious that Katayama is Japanese. Well, many people can tell by the last name, but I'd suggest saying "the latter" instead of "the Japanese driver".- Of course. I thought I had already denoted his nationality. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:17, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
Practice and qualifying
The drivers, of whom only Berger and Brundle had raced at Nürburgring in a Formula One car before, were uninspired by the circuit
- this reads a bit awkwardly.- The bit about two drivers having driven it before is an aside, and I've removed. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:17, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
Two practice sessions were held before the race; the first was held on Friday morning and the second on Saturday morning
- I would also condense this, e.g. "Two practice sessions were held before the race: on Friday morning and on Saturday morning." Since there are only two, I assume "the first" and "the second" can be dropped.- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:17, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
As Hill was mathematically the only possible contender to challenge Schumacher for the championship, the question of if Williams should use team orders.
- This looks like a run-on sentence. I don't quite understand what the last part of the sentence is trying to say.- I've expanded this, it's more that, if one of your drivers can win the championship, should you slow the other one down, to allow them to have the best chance to win. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:17, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
- Oh, OK. That makes sense now. epicgenius (talk) 19:32, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
- I've expanded this, it's more that, if one of your drivers can win the championship, should you slow the other one down, to allow them to have the best chance to win. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:17, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
Race
Alesi held position to finish second in his Ferrari, with Coulthard third - 35 seconds behind.
- change the hyphen to an en-dash for consistency- I never ran the script, so I've done this throughout. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:21, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
Post-race
Journalist Alan Henry described the race as the best of the season to date,[8] and even of recent memory
- I'd add a comma after "recent memory".- done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:21, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
[14][9]
,[9][1]
, etc - I would recommend rearranging these reference numbers, but this is optional.- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:21, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
in which pundits felt that he had not been "forceful" enough in his battle with Schumacher
- any pundits in particular?- added Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:21, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
was also criticised by some
- I'd remove "by some", since it's basically fluff - the sentence makes clear that he was criticised.- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:21, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
Fantastic review as always epicgenius, let me know if there is any more I need to look at. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:21, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
- @Lee Vilenski: No problem. There's just a few things with the references to smooth out. epicgenius (talk) 19:32, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
References
edit- I wonder if it's possible to combine the various refs to the following, with either {{rp}} or shortened footnotes:
Henry, Alan (December 1995) [1995]. "1995 Grands Prix: Grand Prix of Europe".
- refs 1, 8, 9, 14, 25Domenjoz, Luc (1995). "The 17 Grand Prix - Grand Prix of Europe".
- refs 3, 19, 30Henry, Alan (December 1995) [1995]. "1995 Grands Prix: Portuguese Grand Prix".
- refs 5 and 7Henry, Alan (December 1995) [1995]. "1995 Grands Prix: Pacific Grand Prix".
- refs 43 and 45- Done. I'm not super familiar with this, but the Henry sources are all from the same book, just different chapters. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:52, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
- Ref 37, "FIA Formula 1 World Championship – 1995 Season Review", has an error message |access-date= requires |url=.
- Ah, there is no url I've removed. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:52, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
- Ref 39, ""Grand Prix Mechanics Charitable Trust - The Trust in Action", is missing a publisher or website.
- Added a param Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:52, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
- In general, I would either link authors only on the first reference where they're mentioned, or link authors every reference they're mentioned.
- Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:52, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
- Spotchecks came up good.
- Ideal. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:52, 31 October 2020 (UTC)
Images and copyright
edit- Images are appropriately licensed.
- Copyright checks did not bring up any issues.
General comments
edit- I took a look at Talk:1995 European Grand Prix/GA1, and I feel the comments there are stale due to the recent improvements to this page. So, for the purpose of this review, I didn't take these comments into account. The article is evidently in much better shape than back in 2009.
- On hold epicgenius (talk) 18:51, 31 October 2020 (UTC)