Talk:1981 World Snooker Championship/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 13:32, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

Shall review for the GAN October 2020 Backlog Drive. MWright96 (talk) 13:32, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Infobox

• The players names should be put into the flagathlete template

• Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 17:26, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

Lead

• Don't think the pound sign should be linked

• Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 17:48, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

• "The defending champion was Cliff Thorburn, who lost 10–16 in the semi-final to Steve Davis. Davis went on to win his first world title," - try not to start the beginning of the following sentence like this

• Reworded. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 23:27, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

• No refs in the lead please per MOS:LEAD

• Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 17:48, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

• Think the second paragraph of the lead could do with some expanding with relevant details

• Reworded. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 23:27, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

Overview

• "The World Snooker Championship is an annual snooker tournament the official world championship of the game of snooker." - there are a few words missing from this sentence

• Amended. Tout to self. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 17:36, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

• "The 1981 tournament featured 24 professional for the second year." - 24 professional players for the second year running.

• Amended. Another trout to self. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 17:36, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

• Wikilink seeded on the first mention to Seed (sports)
• "Ray Reardon was regarded as the bookmaker's favourite to win at that time," - typo in the text in bold; should be written bookmakers

• Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 17:36, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

• "Mountjoy's odds of winning were assessed as 20–1." - Mountjoy should be written out in full and wikilinked since this is the first time he is mentioned in the prose

• Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 17:36, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

Qualifying

• "All qualifying matches were the best of seventeen frames." - best-of-seventeen

• Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 17:38, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

• Wikilink frame to the relevant article for non-Snooker readers

• Added cuegloss link. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 17:38, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

First round

• "and were the best of nineteen frames." - best-of-nineteen

• Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 17:46, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

• "all made their World Championship debuts." - needs to be explicitly verified

• Amended. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 22:53, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

• Wikilink century break and break on the first mention

• Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 17:46, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

• "and then defeated White at 10–8." - the word in bold is not needed IMO

• Amended. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 17:46, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

• "Knowles compiled a 101 break in his match against Graham Miles. Miles won the match after having earlier been tied at 5–6, 6–6, and 8–8." - Try not to have the last word of a sentence start the next one like this.

• Reworded. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 17:46, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

• Black, yellow and penalty points should be wikilinked to the appropriate articles to help non-Snooker readers

• Added cuegloss links. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 17:46, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

• "The 1968 World Amateur Champion David Taylor won the first three frames against the 1978 World Amateur Champion Cliff Wilson. Wilson then won four consecutive frames," - similar issue to the fifth point

• Reworded. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 17:46, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

• "The two-times World Amateur Champion Ray Edmonds had never beaten John Spencer in a match," - two-time

• Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 17:46, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

• Briefly explain who Jack Karnehm is to those who do not know

• Added a little - I've included "and author" as the source is one of his books book rather than his TV commentary. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 22:41, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

Second round

• "and were the best of nineteen frames." - best-of-nineteen

• Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 21:13, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

• "Davis won the match 13–9." - think this sentence can be expanded somewhat with relevant details

• Added some details. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 22:28, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

• "and won 13–7 to reach his first world championship final since 1977" - quarter-final

• Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 21:13, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

• "Stevens had been unable to use the practice table at the venue before the match because it was being used to record a programme for television broadcast." - I believe the text in bold should be written to a television broadcast or television

• Amended. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 21:13, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

Quarter-finals

• "and were the best of 25 frames." - best-of-25

• Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 20:55, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

Semi-finals

• Wikilink Romford and blue ball to the appropriate articles

• Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 21:10, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

• "According to Karnehm, Thorburn "was still seething at this result and the remarks of the gloating Romford fans in their own stronghold" - sentence needs to be ended with a full stop

• Amended. BennyOnTheLoose (talk)

• "It was level at 9-9," - en dash please as per MOS:DASH

• Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 21:10, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

• "Davis was 80–23 ahead with only pink and black remaining," - only the pink

• Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 21:10, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

• "However, when David offered Thorburn a handshake," - Davis

• Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 21:10, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

Final

• The image caption of Steve Davis is incomplete

• Amended, but I'm not sure whether it's OK now. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 23:30, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

• "as a best of 35 frames match." - best-of-35

• Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 21:05, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

• Black ball and blue ball do not need to be linked here

• Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 21:05, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

• Wikilink pocket to the relevant article

• Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 21:05, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

• "leaving Davis 8-5 ahead at the mid-session interval." - en dash please

• Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 21:05, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

• "Mountjoy won the last frame of the second to finish 8–10 behind." - of the second session

• Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 21:05, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

• "and they then each won two of the session's last four frames to leave Davis 14–12 ahead" - subsequently

• Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 21:05, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

• Mention that this was Davis' first World Championship win out of six and verify this with a reliable source

• Added this, and a little more detail. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 21:52, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

Main draw

• "Numbers in (parentheses) indicate seedings." - Numbers in brackets to the right of players' names indicate the top 16 seeds.

• Amended. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 18:05, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

• State that the bolding in the tables denote the match winners for the uninitiated and for compliance with MOS:ACCESS

• Amended. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 18:05, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

• As with other snooker tournaments at GA and FA level, the players in the first row should be formatted with the flagathlete template

• Amended. I've used flagathlete for the first two rounds. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 20:57, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

Qualifying

• Please mention the bolding of players names is not denote that they won their matches

• Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 20:59, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

Century breaks

• "His record would last until the 1983 tournament." - state it was Thorburn who broke the record with a maximum break

• Done. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 18:00, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

References

• Reference 2 "Why Sheffield truly is the 'home of snooker' as World Championship gets underway" is missing the date it was published

• Added. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 17:50, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

Putting the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 17:06, 26 October 2020 (UTC)

• Many thanks for the thorough review and comments, MWright96 - and my apologies for the howlers that I'd left in. I've replied to your points above. Let me know what else need to be done. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 23:33, 26 October 2020 (UTC)
  • @BennyOnTheLoose: Now promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 09:23, 27 October 2020 (UTC)