Talk:1973 Preakness Stakes/GA1

Latest comment: 8 years ago by MWright96 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 08:57, 25 August 2016 (UTC)Reply

Going to look at this article. MWright96 (talk) 08:57, 25 August 2016 (UTC)Reply

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  

Pre-race activity

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  • "was strange not having any rumors floating around about Secretariat's health." - floating around doesn't sound encyclopedic. I think circulated is better
  • Penn National is a dab link
    • Both Fixed --MTBW

Event details

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  • "with television coverage lasting approximately an hour, while radio coverage lasted twenty minutes" - reptition of lasted(ing)
  • "following being traded to San Diego by owner" - to the San Diego Chargers
    • Both FIXED --MTBW

Race summary

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  • "and crossed the line in first position," - finishing line
  • "This was the first time in the history of the Kentucky Derby and the Preakness Stakes that the horses top three horses in the Derby finished in the same positions at the Preakness." - remove the first mention of "horses"
    • Both FIXED --MTBW

Analysis

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  • "Jockey Ron Turcotte won his second Preakness," - to avoid reptition with the second part of the sentence, try Jockey Ron Turcotte secured his second Preakness victory or something similar
  • "with in Hill Prince in 1950." - remove the first "in"
    • Both FIXED --MTBW

References

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  • References 11, 14, 15 and 22 are shown to have a connection issue
    • FIXED url to direct properly to ProQuest subscription page the same as the other links

Good work so far. On hold until the points have been dealt with. MWright96 (talk) 11:25, 25 August 2016 (UTC)Reply