Talk:1941 Cabo San Lucas hurricane/GA1

Latest comment: 10 years ago by ComputerJA in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: ComputerJA (talk · contribs) 20:20, 5 July 2013 (UTC)Reply

  • I'll gladly review this! Thanks for your work on the article. ComputerJA () 20:20, 5 July 2013 (UTC)Reply

Review edit

Really interesting article. It is well-written, cited accordingly, and very informative. Below are a few of my concerns that need to be addressed. This is the first part of the review. I'll be checking out the sources on the second part for accuracy and be posting if there are any concerns needed to be addressed. Thanks again. ComputerJA () 20:59, 5 July 2013 (UTC)Reply

Intro
  • The 1941 Cabo San Lucas hurricane is considered one of the worst tropical cyclones on record to affect Cabo San Lucas. – Given that Cabo San Lucas is mentioned twice, consider changing to 'affect the region of Baja California Sur' or something similar.
  • Two villages were completely destroyed. Furthermore, Cabo San Lucas was virtually destroyed – Considering rephrasing so that destroyed is not used twice.
  • In addition, the hurricane destroyed the tuna canning industry – The intro implies that the tuna cannding industry was destroyed in La Paz, while the sections below suggest that it actually happened in San José del Cabo. Consider adding the exact location in the intro.
  • The remnants of the storm later brought rains to California and Arizona. – Rains on California were already mentioned in the intro. Maybe you can add Arizona and its measurements together with California.
Meteorological history
  • A tropical storm was first reported on September 8 – Please add the year so it won't be necessary later on.
  • and entered the Gulf of California – Please link Gulf of California.
    • I do so in the lead. I chose to do one wikilink in the article, given how short it is. YE Pacific Hurricane 23:12, 5 July 2013 (UTC)Reply
Impact and aftermath
  • Throughout the peninsula, 15 people were killed, and many were injured. – It is not a necessity, but do you have the exact figures for those injured? It would be interesting to know.
  • The port town of Cabo San Lucas was washed away and mostly destroyed due to flooding – Please link Cabo San Lucas.
  • Strong winds and heavy rain lashed the southern tip of the Baja California Peninsula for 48 hours – Please link Baja California Peninsula.
  • La Paz, Baja California Sur and nearby villages – Likewise.
  • Word War II – Likewise.
  • Four other stations record more than 2 in (51 mm) – What do you mean by stations? Should it be changed to recorded, too?
Reviewing sources

All information is cited accordingly. My only concern is this source. Is it a reliable one?

Given the wording, I think it it okay. Thanks for the review. YE Pacific Hurricane 23:12, 5 July 2013 (UTC)Reply

Thanks for your replies. Article passes. Good job! ComputerJA () 23:41, 5 July 2013 (UTC)Reply