Talk:1933 World Snooker Championship/GA1

Latest comment: 2 years ago by MWright96 in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 11:49, 2 July 2021 (UTC)Reply

Shall review for the July 2021 GAN Backlog Drive MWright96 (talk) 11:49, 2 July 2021 (UTC)Reply

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  

Background edit

  • "with a five-guineas" - don't think the hyphen is needed here

Summary edit

  • "Leigh won the first frame after Donaldson went in-off when potting the final black ball, and added the second after clearing from the brown to the black, then moving into a 4–0 lead." - run-on sentence
  • For the above text, the term black should be wikilinked to the relevant article
  • "Donaldson took the first frame," - think there are some words missing from this portion of text
  • "and each won two frames in the morning session" - each player or each competitor
  • Wikilink the term frame to the appropriate article only on the first mention
  • "Smith won the first frame of the third day to win the match 13–4." - repetition of "wo(i)n"
  • The term clearance can be wikilinked to the correct article for non-snooker readers
  • "He then won the first two in the evening to win 13–1," - a word is missing here; also Davis then claimed
  • "Davis then won four of the five in the evening to extend his lead to 22–17." - a word missing from this sentence
  • "Davis won all four afternoon frames on the first day but Smith won three in the evening to leave Davis 5–3 ahead." repetition of "wo(i)n"
  • "He then won the next to lead 24–17 and, although Smith won the third, Davis won the last in the afternoon to take the match 25–18 and win the title for the seventh time." - some missing words in this sentence

Schedule edit

  • Think the two references can be placed on the table header instead on the right hand side of the table

Main draw edit

  • The flag athlete template will need to be used in this section

Am putting the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the points raised above MWright96 (talk) 14:45, 2 July 2021 (UTC)Reply