Talk:Øvre Pasvik National Park
Latest comment: 11 years ago by MathewTownsend in topic GA Review
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- This review is transcluded from Talk:Øvre Pasvik National Park/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: MathewTownsend (talk · contribs) 19:44, 28 August 2012 (UTC) Hi, I'll review this article. It looks very good, skimming through it, so I expect no problems. MathewTownsend (talk) 19:44, 28 August 2012 (UTC)
- review
- "is located south-east in Pasvikdalen in southern Sør-Varanger, Norway." - does "south-east refer to where it is in Pasvikdalen? i.e. it's in south-east Pasvikdalen? Or is something else meant?
- "the adjacent Øvre Pasvik Landscape Protection Area, Pasvik Nature Reserve, the Russian part of the nature reserve and Finland's Vätsäri Wilderness Area." - does this mean that Øvre Pasvik Landscape Protection Area, Pasvik Nature Reserve is the Russian part?
- perhaps use () like:
- "Øvre Pasvik is part of Pasvik–Inari Trilateral Park along with the adjacent Øvre Pasvik Landscape Protection Area, Pasvik Nature Reserve (the Russian part of the nature reserve) and Finland's Vätsäri Wilderness Area. ?
- "supplemented with bog." - adjacent to? along with? intertwined with? along with?
- "eastern border crosses through Ivergammevatnet, Revsaksfjellet and Ødevatn" - perhaps you could briefly identify what these are? (I realized later they are lakes, but to the non-Norwegian reader all these name become confusing)
- since geology is the "study of", changed to "rock compostion" - ok?
- "This again led to lack of moraines" - don't understand what "again" refers to.
- "There are some spread non-vegetated flat screes" - don't understand this sentence.
- "after 1945 the population on the Russian side was forcefully moved and the area depopulated" - passive voice - who forcefully moved them? (per Wikipedia:Manual of Style (words to watch))
- "Pasvikelva regulated for hydroelectricity from the 1940s" - was regulated - by (whom)?
- "The proposal was official issued to the Ministry of Agriculture" - not grammatical
- "but they halted the prosess as they principally were opposed to all forms of conservation as they wanted all natural resources to be exploited." - who is "they" - also kind of a runon sentence
- "in his death year of 1951" - unusual wording - perhaps "in 1951, the year of his death,"?
- " with the proposal of building a highway" - with the proposal to build? (more grammatical)
- "highway up Pasvikdalen to Ivalo, Finland, which would run through the protected area. " - not quite clear to me
(will continue)
- "The forest has a very slow life cycle, giving typical tree ages of between 300 and 400 year; the oldest recorded tree was 820 years." - perhaps "The age of a typical tree is between 300 and 400 year; the oldest recorded tree is 820 years as of 2012." - "was" indicates the typical tree age of 820 years is no longer true.
- "young trees are often killed by moose during winter" - how do moose kill huge trees?
- "The park has been hit regularly by wildfire" - "hit" doesn't seem encyclopedic to me
- "As the pine trees do not have low-laying branches, the fires will normally spread along the ground, killing any young trees." - don't understand
- "killing any young trees." - should this be "all young trees"
- "The slow growth any forest fire can kill tens of generations of trees" - needs rewording
- "but the remaining ashes give good conditions for young trees, giving an uneven age distribution of spruce" - does this mean that spruce is taking over the pine forests? (has spruce been mentioned before in the article?)
- " None of the islands in Ellensvatn have had fires, giving a unique forest composition. - unique in what way?
- perhaps remind the reader that Ellensvatn is a lake?
- Norway Spruce mentioned for the first time.
- "The lack of spruce is caused by a combination of wildfire and frost as late as June" - unclear - lack of wldfire as late as June? Or should it be "The lack of spruce is caused by a combination of frost as late as June and wildfire.
- Is all spruce Norway Spruce? or are there other spruces there also?
- " Pasvik is one of very few areas in Norway with Laxmann's Shrew." - in Norway where Laxmann's Shrew is found. ?
- "The park is permitted used for reindeer husbandry," - not grammatical - The park permits reindeer husbandry? - who gives the permits? the park? the government?
- "All but the latter have arrived since the last glacial period from Lake Inari, where they ultimately came from the Baltic Sea, which at that time consisted of fresh water." - runon sentence - maybe make two sentences out of it? - not sure how to fix it.
- "The trout came up Pasvikdalen about 8000 BC" is Pasvikdalen a river also?
- "The national park has not been organized for recreation." - but then the article describes canoeing, boating, skiiing, walking, camping, hunting, fishing ....
- I've made some edits that you're free to change.[1]
Meanwhile, I'll put the article on hold.
Best wishes, MathewTownsend (talk) 19:35, 29 August 2012 (UTC)
- Thank you very much for the thorough review; the feedback is most appreciated. I have seen to all your comments except one, which I did not understand and which way have been made irrelevant by the misrepresentation of pine as spruce. Arsenikk (talk) 19:58, 30 August 2012 (UTC)
- I made a few more copy edits which as always you are free to change.[2]
- I left a note on your page re "Eventually seven power stations were built which regulated the entire fall height in the river." I don't know what "regulated entire fall height in the river" means. Can you clarify?
- I will trust that you will do so. Everything else looks great.
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Congratulations! MathewTownsend (talk) 16:49, 31 August 2012 (UTC)