Draft talk:Pace Hospitals
Latest comment: 1 year ago by Marshelec in topic Recommended improvements
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Recommended improvements
edit@Subodh Vishwakarma: The draft article is improving and is close to being ready for acceptance. Here are some specific suggestions:
- Replace the first sentence with these three sentences and citations:
- PACE Hospitals is a privately owned specialist hospital based in Hyderabad, Telangana, India. PACE is the trading name of OMRV Hospitals, a private unlisted company incorporated on 23 September 2011. The hospital operates in the international healthcare market.[1][2]
- convert the ALL CAPS text in the second paragraph to sentence case, in accordance with MOS:CAPS
- review the recently added citations where there are more than 2 cites in a row, to eliminate redundancy and avoid WP:CITEOVERKILL. If there are multiple news outlet items about a single event, and with essentially similar content, only one should be included
- relocate the content about the hospital departments to become the last section of the article, and provide a citation for where this content comes from (if you cannot provide a citation, this section should be deleted)
- ^ "OMRV Hospitals Pvt Ltd". Bloomberg News. Retrieved 5 May 2023.
- ^ "OMRV Hospitals Private Limited". The Economic Times. Retrieved 5 May 2023.
..Marshelec (talk) 20:48, 5 May 2023 (UTC) Marshelec (talk) 20:48, 5 May 2023 (UTC)
- Thank you Marshelec,
- As per the suggestions, I modified and added the content. Kindly provide your kind suggestions in case anything further is required to be added or changed. Subodh Vishwakarma (talk) 21:13, 6 May 2023 (UTC)
- @Subodh Vishwakarma: I have made a considerable number of changes, mostly re-arrangements of content, but also the correction of some details, including tidying up a citation. Please review these changes and let me know your thoughts, before I take the next step.Marshelec (talk) 23:28, 6 May 2023 (UTC)
- @Marshelec: Thank you for your valuable inputs and corrections. It looks fine; you can take the next step. Subodh Vishwakarma (talk) 07:53, 8 May 2023 (UTC)
- @Marshelec If all the suggestions and edits are completed, can I resubmit the article? Subodh Vishwakarma (talk) 20:08, 8 May 2023 (UTC)
- Please see my comment on your talk page about the logo image. Marshelec (talk) 06:45, 9 May 2023 (UTC)
- @Marshelec After successful submission, the submission was again declined on 9 May 2023 by RPSkokie.
- Dear @Marshelec and @RPSkokie, Kindly provide your suggestions and inputs so that article can qualifie for a Wikipedia article Subodh Vishwakarma (talk) 14:58, 9 May 2023 (UTC)
- Please see my comment on your talk page about the logo image. Marshelec (talk) 06:45, 9 May 2023 (UTC)
- @Marshelec If all the suggestions and edits are completed, can I resubmit the article? Subodh Vishwakarma (talk) 20:08, 8 May 2023 (UTC)
- @Marshelec: Thank you for your valuable inputs and corrections. It looks fine; you can take the next step. Subodh Vishwakarma (talk) 07:53, 8 May 2023 (UTC)
- @Subodh Vishwakarma: I have made a considerable number of changes, mostly re-arrangements of content, but also the correction of some details, including tidying up a citation. Please review these changes and let me know your thoughts, before I take the next step.Marshelec (talk) 23:28, 6 May 2023 (UTC)
- @Subodh Vishwakarma: The core issue about coverage and reliable sources that I noted when I first reviewed the draft has not yet been fully addressed. There is still not sufficient content, supported by independent and high quality reliable sources that discusses the hospital in depth. To help understand what may be required, please see: WP:WikiProject Hospitals/Tutorials and WP:ORG. Although there are many mentions of PACE Hospitals in internet sources, the vast majority of these are simple listings in directories, or review websites that do not contain in-depth content about the hospital as an organisation, and these sources usually do not qualify as high quality, reliable sources. If you could find a single, good quality news article that discusses the hospital in some depth, that might be sufficient, along with the existing content and sources. As a side observation, I have looked at other articles in the Category:Hospitals_in_Hyderabad,_India [1]. Several of the articles in this category are flagged with maintenance templates stating that they require additional citations, so the difficulty with this article is not unique. The purpose of the Articles for Creation process is to try and ensure that articles reach a minimum standard before publication. It may prove a challenge to find a suitable source, partly because it is a private company, rather than a public institution. I have found a few academic papers written by doctors working at PACE Hospitals, but these say little if anything about the hospital as an organisation. Perhaps you may have better access to sources, and may be able to find something. I will spend a bit more time searching, and let you know if I find anything that appears to be helpful.Marshelec (talk) 21:57, 9 May 2023 (UTC)
- Here are some suggestions for searching for sources:
- I have found a couple of (not high quality) sources that state that the CEO is Meghna Varma. It is possible that there might have been news coverage of the appointment of the CEO in reliable sources, and that this might have included some factual background about the hospital. Alternatively, perhaps there has been a published interview with the CEO, where the writer may have included background informaton about the hospital.
- Sometimes, there is useful background information about an organisation published by a separate company that supplies design services or equipment when working on a project for the organisation. For instance, perhaps a supplier of advanced medical or operating theatre equipment has given some background about PACE Hospitals in a write-up of their project work.
- It appears that Hyderabad is a major destination for international medical care. Perhaps there has been a write-up of the importance of international health care in Hyderabad, and this could include some content about PACE Hospitals as one of the providers, and the relative scale of their business compared with other private hospitals working in the same market. For example, even having a reliable source for the number of beds would be a useful addition to the article.
- .Marshelec (talk) 00:48, 10 May 2023 (UTC)
- Here are some suggestions for searching for sources:
- @Subodh Vishwakarma: The core issue about coverage and reliable sources that I noted when I first reviewed the draft has not yet been fully addressed. There is still not sufficient content, supported by independent and high quality reliable sources that discusses the hospital in depth. To help understand what may be required, please see: WP:WikiProject Hospitals/Tutorials and WP:ORG. Although there are many mentions of PACE Hospitals in internet sources, the vast majority of these are simple listings in directories, or review websites that do not contain in-depth content about the hospital as an organisation, and these sources usually do not qualify as high quality, reliable sources. If you could find a single, good quality news article that discusses the hospital in some depth, that might be sufficient, along with the existing content and sources. As a side observation, I have looked at other articles in the Category:Hospitals_in_Hyderabad,_India [1]. Several of the articles in this category are flagged with maintenance templates stating that they require additional citations, so the difficulty with this article is not unique. The purpose of the Articles for Creation process is to try and ensure that articles reach a minimum standard before publication. It may prove a challenge to find a suitable source, partly because it is a private company, rather than a public institution. I have found a few academic papers written by doctors working at PACE Hospitals, but these say little if anything about the hospital as an organisation. Perhaps you may have better access to sources, and may be able to find something. I will spend a bit more time searching, and let you know if I find anything that appears to be helpful.Marshelec (talk) 21:57, 9 May 2023 (UTC)