Talk:William de Blois (bishop of Lincoln)/GA1

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Reviewer: Ironholds (talk) 13:32, 17 February 2010 (UTC)Reply

  • "He first served Hugh du Puiset, the Bishop of Durham, then later served Hugh of Avalon" - served as/doing what?
  • link "episcopate".
  • "Possibly related to Hugh de Puiset the bishop of Durham, who he went on to serve later in life,[1] Blois probably came from Blois in France,[1] His relationship with Puiset reinforces the likelihood of his origins being in Blois, as Puiset was a nephew of King Stephen of England and Stephen's brother Henry of Blois, the Bishop of Winchester, both of whom came from Blois" - divide into two sentences. I'd suggest "Possibly related to Hugh de Puiset, the Bishop of Durham, who he went on to serve later in life,[1] Blois probably came from Blois in France.[1] His relationship with Puiset reinforces the likelihood of his origins being in Blois, as Puiset was a nephew of King Stephen of England and Stephen's brother Henry of Blois, the Bishop of Winchester, both of whom came from Blois"
  • "Blois frequently was a witness " - "Blois was frequently a witness"
  • "Blois had moved to the household of Hugh of Avalon" - link Hugh of Avalon
  • "he served Pope Innocent III as well" - "he also served Pope Innocent III"