Talk:Typhoon Eli/GA1
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Latest comment: 4 years ago by Eddie891 in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Eddie891 (talk · contribs) 23:41, 8 May 2020 (UTC)
I can take this one on. Eddie891 Talk Work 23:41, 8 May 2020 (UTC)
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- "known in the Philippines as Typhoon Konsing" suggest mentioning in article body so you can move this out of the lede
- "23 people were hurt" -> " 23 people were injured"? hurt can be a rather vague term
- link Shrimp farming?
- could link Coconut tree and Pepper tree?
- Suggest adding a year to the first paragraph in the body to give the reader something to anchor on
- "Following the recurvature of Typhoon Deanna on July 2" What was Typhoon Deanna? Perhaps one more sentence of introductory set-up would be apt?
- link Monsoon trough?
- is there a link for 'ridging'?
- "with both the JTWC and JMA also analyzing a peak intensity" suggest removing 'both' because you then go on to talk about how they differ
- " improved drought conditions" -> "alleviated drought conditions"?
- " initial reports of 25 fishermen were" -> "initial reports of 25 fishermen"
- source #9 is available for free here
- Ref #2 could use page numbers as it's a 200+ page document
That's all from me. The article otherwise meets GA criteria. Feel free to discuss any of these. Nice work! Eddie891 Talk Work 12:17, 9 May 2020 (UTC)