Talk:Take It Off (Kesha song)/GA1

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Latest comment: 13 years ago by Adabow in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Adabow (talk · contribs) 08:57, 12 November 2010 (UTC)Reply

I'll put the review on hold now. Adabow (talk · contribs) 09:41, 12 November 2010 (UTC)Reply

Good work, I'll pass now. Adabow (talk · contribs) 22:44, 12 November 2010 (UTC)Reply

Lead

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  • Mention release and recording details in body of article
  • Sometimes Lukasz Gottwald, sometimes Dr. Luke. Be consistent.
    • I use Lukasz Gottwald twice in the article, once in the Lead and once under Credits, this is so the full name is known.
  • "Other critics felt the song was a strong, irresistible dance pop song strictly made for the dance floor with a great carefree message" - comma after 'dance pop song'
    •   Done
  • Link dance pop. Auto-tune can be linked earlier than it is.
    •   Done

Writing and inspiration

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  • This section is quite short. Can I suggest you merge this with the 'Composition' section?
  • '"Take It Off" was written by Kesha, alongside Dr. Luke, and Claude Kelly.' - don't need a comma after Dr. Luke
    • Both issues done.

Composition

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  • The header for the audio sample would be better as "Take It Off". Regardless, the title should be enclosed by quote marks.
    •   Done
  • The file is currently reading as 130kbps. Is this the same problem as you had with "Baby"?
    • Audio is lower then original, the Audiowhatever wont let me lower it anymore. Myself and Candyo had the same issue with Baby.
  • "Music reviewer Bill Lamb, commented on..." - don't need a comma after Bill Lamb
    •   Done
  • "Lamb further commented that the lyrics drew similar reference to that of Lady Gaga's commenting," → Lamb further commented that the lyrics were to those of Lady Gaga's, commenting,
  • What about the lyrics are similar to Gaga's?
    • "Lamb further commented that the lyrics drew similar reference to that of Lady Gaga's commenting, "followers of Lady Gaga's Monster Ball Tour will be familiar with this point of view [about free expression].""

Critical reception

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  • "He was concerned with the overall lyrical depth and over use of auto-tune but he" - over-use should be hyphenated, comma after auto-tune
    •   Done
  • with the volume turned up and the chorus encouraging you to "take it off," - a quote in a quote should have inverted commas, not two sets of quote marks
  • "He commented on the choice of the single noting" - comma after 'single'
    •   Done
  • "He went on the give the single" → to give the single
    • Whoopsies,   Done
  • Link BBC
    •   Done

Chart performance

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  • I have spotted inconsistencies between this section, the table, and references. Please check all chart positions are accurate throughout.
    • Oops, there was issues with New Zealand in Chart performance, has now been corrected.   Done
  • Ref 10 would look better at end of sentence
    •   Done
  • Link Billboard Hot 100
    •   Done
  • "In Canada, the song ascended and descended the chart for twelve weeks before finally dropping off the chart. On July 13, 2010, the song re-entered..." - give a date when the song first dropped off
  • four-teen should be fourteen
    •   Done
  • Is there a reason why you omit the NZ cert?
    • Was certified after i nominated, didnt think to add it.   Done

Music videos

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  • Is there only one review of the first video?
    • All i could find unfortunately.
  • Your main source for the second video has a review which is not discussed in the article
    • Yes, but i dont use his for reviews on anything, good for composition and stuff but he's not very neutral, i have yet to read a review where he doesnt call her a drunk slut or something. His reviews arn't neural, if it wasnt published by NYC holding i wouldnt include it at all.

Live performances

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  • NBC and Today Show need linking. Today Show needs italics (note: it is called Today or The Today Show, not Today Show)
    •   Done

Credits and personnel

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  • Links?
    •   Done? i think, trying to avoid overlinking

References

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  • Mention that the video is at VEVO
    • Not needed, its just a link to the video :)