Talk:Take It Off (Kesha song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Adabow (talk · contribs) 08:57, 12 November 2010 (UTC)

I'll put the review on hold now. Adabow (talk · contribs) 09:41, 12 November 2010 (UTC)

Good work, I'll pass now. Adabow (talk · contribs) 22:44, 12 November 2010 (UTC)

Lead

• Mention release and recording details in body of article
  • It is, its covered in Credits and Release, it doesnt need to be put in written form.
    • You need something, a reference at least Adabow (talk · contribs) 22:42, 12 November 2010 (UTC)
• Sometimes Lukasz Gottwald, sometimes Dr. Luke. Be consistent.
  • I use Lukasz Gottwald twice in the article, once in the Lead and once under Credits, this is so the full name is known.
    • I still don't agree with it, but as the GA reviewer for "Tik Tok" was OK with it I'll let it go. Adabow (talk · contribs) 22:42, 12 November 2010 (UTC)
• "Other critics felt the song was a strong, irresistible dance pop song strictly made for the dance floor with a great carefree message" - comma after 'dance pop song'
  •  Done
• Link dance pop. Auto-tune can be linked earlier than it is.
  •  Done

Writing and inspiration

• This section is quite short. Can I suggest you merge this with the 'Composition' section?
• '"Take It Off" was written by Kesha, alongside Dr. Luke, and Claude Kelly.' - don't need a comma after Dr. Luke
  • Both issues done.

Composition

• The header for the audio sample would be better as "Take It Off". Regardless, the title should be enclosed by quote marks.
  •  Done
• The file is currently reading as 130kbps. Is this the same problem as you had with "Baby"?
  • Audio is lower then original, the Audiowhatever wont let me lower it anymore. Myself and Candyo had the same issue with Baby.
• "Music reviewer Bill Lamb, commented on..." - don't need a comma after Bill Lamb
  •  Done
• "Lamb further commented that the lyrics drew similar reference to that of Lady Gaga's commenting," → Lamb further commented that the lyrics were to those of Lady Gaga's, commenting,
• What about the lyrics are similar to Gaga's?
  • "Lamb further commented that the lyrics drew similar reference to that of Lady Gaga's commenting, "followers of Lady Gaga's Monster Ball Tour will be familiar with this point of view [about free expression].""

Critical reception

• "He was concerned with the overall lyrical depth and over use of auto-tune but he" - over-use should be hyphenated, comma after auto-tune
  •  Done
• with the volume turned up and the chorus encouraging you to "take it off," - a quote in a quote should have inverted commas, not two sets of quote marks
  • I dont know what that means :P help?
    • I did it :) Adabow (talk · contribs) 22:16, 12 November 2010 (UTC)
• "He commented on the choice of the single noting" - comma after 'single'
  •  Done
• "He went on the give the single" → to give the single
  • Whoopsies,  Done
• Link BBC
  •  Done

Chart performance

• I have spotted inconsistencies between this section, the table, and references. Please check all chart positions are accurate throughout.
  • Oops, there was issues with New Zealand in Chart performance, has now been corrected.  Done
• Ref 10 would look better at end of sentence
  •  Done
• Link Billboard Hot 100
  •  Done
• "In Canada, the song ascended and descended the chart for twelve weeks before finally dropping off the chart. On July 13, 2010, the song re-entered..." - give a date when the song first dropped off
• four-teen should be fourteen
  •  Done
• Is there a reason why you omit the NZ cert?
  • Was certified after i nominated, didnt think to add it.  Done

Music videos

• Is there only one review of the first video?
  • All i could find unfortunately.
• Your main source for the second video has a review which is not discussed in the article
  • Yes, but i dont use his for reviews on anything, good for composition and stuff but he's not very neutral, i have yet to read a review where he doesnt call her a drunk slut or something. His reviews arn't neural, if it wasnt published by NYC holding i wouldnt include it at all.

Live performances

• NBC and Today Show need linking. Today Show needs italics (note: it is called Today or The Today Show, not Today Show)
  •  Done

Credits and personnel

• Links?
  •  Done? i think, trying to avoid overlinking

References

• Billboard has been owned by Prometheus Global Media since Dec 09
  • That was a pain in the ass,  Done :)
    • I know how you feel Adabow (talk · contribs) 22:39, 12 November 2010 (UTC)

External links

• Mention that the video is at VEVO
  • Not needed, its just a link to the video :)