Talk:Adolf Hitler and Stefanie Rabatsch/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 09:28, 20 April 2015 (UTC)

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• Is her date of death not known?

Yes, according to Kubizek and The Daily Mail. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 13:51, 23 April 2015 (UTC)

• Link Bohemia

Done. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 13:51, 23 April 2015 (UTC)

• I think Residences parameter should be made plural

Done. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 13:51, 23 April 2015 (UTC)

• Austrian army officer → Unknown Austrian army officer

Done. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 13:51, 23 April 2015 (UTC)

Lead

• Explain who Hitler is, such as Leader of the Nazi party

Absolutely, good catch; done. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 13:51, 23 April 2015 (UTC)

• has excited much → has been subject to much

Done. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 13:52, 23 April 2015 (UTC)

• Stefanie was born → Use her surname

Not done: It would be confusing to refer to her as "Isak" in the beginning of the article and later as "Rabatsch" further down for the reader. To avoid confusion, I've decided to always use her Christian name when reffering to her, although it's common practice to use surnames in biography articles, but this article (IMO) calls for an exception. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 13:51, 23 April 2015 (UTC)

• Link Linz

Done. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 13:51, 23 April 2015 (UTC)

• Hitler never spoke with her once and she ended up married to an Austrian army officer. → Hitler never once spoke with her, and she later married an Austrian army officer.

Done. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 13:51, 23 April 2015 (UTC)

• towards her. Little is known about her life. → towards her, and little is known about her life.

Background

• Stefanie Izak, as she was known then, → Born Stefanie Izak,

Done. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 13:52, 23 April 2015 (UTC)

• Use Rabatsch from this point onwards, not Stefanie

Per my explanation above, I've decided not to. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 13:51, 23 April 2015 (UTC)

• She was one, perhaps two, years older than he. → She is thought to have been one or two years older than Hitler.

Done. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 13:51, 23 April 2015 (UTC)

• Kubizek's book was heavily cut during the Nazi era, especially the details of Hitler's passion for Stefanie, but was republished in many editions after the war. → Kubizek's book was heavily edited during the Nazi period, especially the parts concerning the details of Hitler's passion for Rabatsch, but was republished in many editions after the war.

Done. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 13:51, 23 April 2015 (UTC)

Interaction with Hitler

• and delivered daily → and deliver daily

Done. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 13:51, 23 April 2015 (UTC)

• was away, visiting → Remove comma

Done. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 13:51, 23 April 2015 (UTC)

• and was taking dancing lessons. → and was had taken up lessons.

Done. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 13:51, 23 April 2015 (UTC)

• stating he had found consolation in that → This isn't very clear

Well, being at the funeral of your mother most likely made the man extremely sad (Hitler was also defined by his close relationship to his mother in his early years), but he found consolation in seeing Stefanie at the funeral (I think she merely passed by, but even so). Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 13:51, 23 April 2015 (UTC)

• Kubizek claims that, → Remove comma

Done. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 13:51, 23 April 2015 (UTC)

• After Hitler's mother died of breast cancer in 1907, the funeral procession went through Urfahr to Leonding and Kubizek remarks that Hitler said he had seen Stefanie at the funeral procession behind her window mother, stating he had found consolation in that.[3]

Kubizek claims that, "Stefanie had no idea how deeply Adolf was in love with her; she regarded him as a somewhat shy, but nevertheless remarkably tenacious and faithful, admirer. When she responded with a smile to his inquiring glance, he was happy and his mood became unlike anything I had ever observed in him. But when Stefanie, as happened just as often, coldly ignored his gaze, he was crushed and ready to destroy himself and the whole world."[3]

Hitler finally stated he planned to kidnap Stefanie and kill both her and himself by jumping off a bridge into the Danube.[2][6] Instead he moved to Vienna, where an idealised image of Stefanie became his moral touchstone.[7][2]

Stefanie stated in later interviews that she was unaware of Hitler at the time, but that she had received an anonymous love letter asking her to wait for him to graduate and then to marry him, which she only realised after being questioned about him, must have been from Hitler.[7] She recalled:

→ Make this one paragraph instead of splitting it off into small bits.

Done. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 13:51, 23 April 2015 (UTC)

• lived in → she lived in

Done. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 13:51, 23 April 2015 (UTC)

• Little is known about her overall life. → It's a bit odd that you've placed this mid-sentence and not at the end of the section.

Agreed; moved. Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 13:51, 23 April 2015 (UTC)

Outcome

I think there is too much usage of the block quote with the large quotation marks. Three in an article this short is too much. Also, could the Adolf Hitler template not be added to the bottom of the article, and she included in it? This article is a bit of stub at the moment. Other than that, on hold for 7 days.  — ₳aron 17:11, 21 April 2015 (UTC)

Calvin999, I agree with the block quotes; have omitted the marks of two and also added her to the Hitler template as well as added the template to the bottom of this page. Thank you so much for your thorough review and helpful comments, I've responded and made edits accordingly. :) Jonas Vinther • (speak to me!) 13:51, 23 April 2015 (UTC)

Thanks. Passing.  — ₳aron 12:57, 24 April 2015 (UTC)

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