Talk:Robert J. McMullen/GA1

GA Review

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This article was promoted by 750h+ 10:47, 5 August 2024 (UTC)

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Nominator: PCN02WPS (talk · contribs) 21:55, 4 March 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: 750h+ (talk · contribs) 05:10, 31 July 2024 (UTC)

Starting review. 750h+ 05:10, 31 July 2024 (UTC)

prose

Feel free to refuse my suggestions with proper justification of course.

lead

• he was licensed to preach in April 1909 and soon after left the country
• president for a four-year term ==> "president for four years"
• its lone president until the following October i would just say "its lone president until October 1946"

early life and education

• I would merge the two paragraphs. There's also quite a lot of usage of "He" rather than his last name.

career

• During his presidency he delivered for consistency with the entire article, add a comma after "presidency"

personal life and death

No problems here

image and source review

• Source review and spot check checks out (as long as "Presbyterian Heritage Center at Montreat" is a reliable source) and article's images look fine; all are public domain. 750h+ 13:15, 3 August 2024 (UTC)

verdict

Excellent small article. Placing on hold. 750h+ 13:15, 3 August 2024 (UTC)

@750h+ All taken care of. As for using "he" instead of his last name, I don't see a problem with that since the subject doesn't change in that paragraph and I don't want to be repetitive with use of his name. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 20:28, 4 August 2024 (UTC)

Seems fine. Passing . 750h+ 10:46, 5 August 2024 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.