Talk:Money for Nothing (1993 film)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: LM150 (talk · contribs) 19:57, 30 December 2020 (UTC)

Hi, happy to review this! Most of the article is in decent shape. But here's my initial comments:

• Your plot is a bit too detailed.. please keep it under 700 words as per manual of style (currently it's 771)

 Done now 690 words Chompy Ace 22:27, 31 December 2020 (UTC)

• Remove the actors names from the plot - these are already in the cast section

 Done Chompy Ace 03:47, 31 December 2020 (UTC)

• "A Blu-ray Disc version was.." - remove the word "disc"

 Done Chompy Ace 03:49, 31 December 2020 (UTC)

• "a total of $1.2 million in $100 bills" - not really necessary to write "a total of"

 Done Chompy Ace 03:48, 31 December 2020 (UTC)

Thanks, my only other issue is this sentence:

• "Interesting in adapting Joey Coyle's story to film originated in December 1983, when a New York-based production company known as The Film Writers Company expressed interest in producing a film detailing his discovery of the money." - I think the first word is meant to be "interest" but you've used that word twice in the same sentence. I would rephrase it, eg. "The film adaptation of Joey Coyle's story originated in December 1983.."

 Done FrankRizzo (talk) 16:08, 1 January 2021 (UTC)

Overall it's a neat article, and sourcing is fine. I know there isn't much to be written about this largely-forgotten film! Happy to promote shortly, thanks LM150 12:02, 1 January 2021 (UTC)