Talk:Mariano Ricafort Palacín y Abarca/GA1

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: Jezhotwells (talk · contribs) 20:16, 10 December 2011 (UTC)Reply

I shall be reviewing this article against the Good Article criteria, following its nomination for Good Article status.

Disambiguations: One found and fixed.[1] Jezhotwells (talk) 20:19, 10 December 2011 (UTC)Reply

Linkrot: none found. Jezhotwells (talk) 20:20, 10 December 2011 (UTC)Reply

Checking against GA criteria edit

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
    Oh dear, this is not "reasonably well written", in fact the prose is very poor. Examples:
    He was son of ; In October of 1799, he was promoted into first lieutenant. "into"?; He was promoted into a brigadier - again "into"; He was in Peru then, under the expedition of General Pablo Morillo. - "He was in Peru at that time"?; after being an idle property at the death of Colonel Jose Miguel "after being an idle property"?;
    OK, this needs a thorough line-by-line copy-edit by someone with a good command of written English.
    The lead does not summarize the article, see WP:LEAD. The sentence He was a kind and able administrator, a governor of good judgment and much energy. is a point of view statement.
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
    What makes http://www.spot.ph/ a reliable source?
    What makes http://www.carabayllo.net/distritos/canta/3533-la-batalla-de-quiapata.html a reliable source?
    What makes http://www.baguionews.net/news/index.php?option=com_content&view=article&id=2660:-an-unauthorized-history-of-the-philippines-7th-in-a-series&catid=6:features&Itemid=13 a reliable source?
    Spot checks indicate that statements are supported by cites.
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
    I don't think much care has been taken in the preparation of this article so I find it hard to determine whether the coverage is broad. The later sections of the article gloss over various significant appointments. There is no sense of what he dis, just a list of jobs. I found the statement The region [Extremdura] ceased to exist by the same year puzzling, as well as ungrammatical. I visited Extremadura earlier this year and I can assure you that it is still there.
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
    The sentence in the lead needs addressing.
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
    Stable, 99% of edits by nominator.
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
    The image appears to be non free and I have nominated it for deletion at Commons.
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  
    A definite fail. I think you need to familiarise yourself with the good article criteria. Get someone to copy-edit the article, then take it to peer review before renominating at GAN. Jezhotwells (talk) 21:01, 10 December 2011 (UTC)Reply
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