Feedback from New Page Review process ("Unfocused" tag)

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I left the following feedback for the creator/future reviewers while reviewing this article: Thank you for this new article, but I honestly wonder if it should actually be about the British Gurkha Welfare Society (BGWS) at large. Most of the available sources are about the group and mention Mr. Dewan as its leader. Therefore the group may be more notable than the man. If the article was focused on the group, there could be a section on leadership describing Mr. Dewan's accomplishments on their behalf..

---DOOMSDAYER520 (Talk|Contribs) 20:22, 25 November 2019 (UTC)Reply

The article has been improved though I will still point out that almost every single source used in the article is about BGWS and there are very few sources out there about Mr. Dewan specifically. Perhaps this indicates that there could be a separate article about BGWS, if anyone would like to create it, because they clearly have a lot of media coverage. ---DOOMSDAYER520 (Talk|Contribs) 19:10, 26 November 2019 (UTC)Reply