Talk:Henry P. Caulfield Jr./GA1

GA Review

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Review by Dabomb87 (talk · contribs) I will be reviewing this article for Good Article status. Dabomb87 (talk) 03:36, 20 January 2009 (UTC)

• As expected, this is a well-written article that has been the subject of substantial effort.
• The lead section (introduction) does not summarize the entire article. A rule of thumb is to summarize each important section in at least one sentence.
• Is there no information about his early life?
• "An avid outdoorsman who suffered from asthma which prevented his hiking, Caulfield was also an avid horseman, advocating preservation of riding trails in the wooded parks of Washington, D.C." "which prevented his hiking"—Disrupts the flow of the sentence and seems irrelevant. This and the sentences that directly follow it need inline citations.
• The "Professor" section seems listy. Perhaps you could make it a bulleted list (see WP:LIST. There is a typo ("Ca1ifornia"); the list seems incomplete (the paragraph's ending punctuation is a semicolon) and the information needs an inline citation (at the end of the paragraph if it can be attributed to one source).
• "National advisory committees" section needs an inline citation.
• "Education" likewise.
• "Scholarly and professional writing" Same.
• Rename the "Selected publications..." section to "Selected works". It is Wikipedia's convention to not repeat the article's subject in the header.
• The article ("Public service" section in particular) could use with a few more internal links.
• Another typo: "U.S. Agency for Internationa1"
• The external links do not seem to relate to the subject of the article.
• "He began his public service career as an economist with the Works Projects Administration (1940–41) before serving in the U.S. Navy" Comma after this phrase.
• "Caufield was invited to visiting appointments" Maybe I am ignorant, but what are "visiting appointments"?

I feel the article is within reach, so I am putting it on hold. Dabomb87 (talk) 01:41, 21 January 2009 (UTC)

External links are all mentioned in the article. He was employed by US Dept of the Interior in several capacities; AWRA is the organization that gives an annual award in Caulfield's name; he helped write and get enacted the Water Resources Planning Act, and especially the section on calulating benefits of water projects under that Act.

"Visiting appointments" are "Visiting Professor," Visiting Lecturer," Visiting Distinguished Practitioner" that universities worldwide give to faculty who visit for a semester or a year to lecture and teach, with no expectation of permanent employment. They are honorary titles like "Fulbright Fellow," too similar and too numerous to specify here, so I tried to characterize them as "visiting appointments." Often granted to faculty on sabbaticals from another school. Would "visiting academic appointments" be better, or too repetitive of remainder of sentence? Will a bulleted list make the Table of Contents too long, or not get picked up?

Not much info about his early life. I think his parents were missionaries in China (hence his china interest) but didn't leave a paper trail. I'll see if I can find anything, but I'm not optimistic.

Most of his publications are in my library so I'm not citing a list of them made by somebody else, but citing them directly. The rest were found in WorldCat, a catalog of books held in libraries throughout the world. Simply counted the ones I found, and no inline citation available for that. I'll see what I can find for the other inline cites you request. May take a few days. Mervyn Emrys (talk) 03:52, 21 January 2009 (UTC)

No problem, I can wait. I may have more comments tomorrow. Dabomb87 (talk) 03:59, 21 January 2009 (UTC)

Ok, reorganized some stuff. Please take a look and tell me if I missed anything. Mervyn Emrys (talk) 18:39, 21 January 2009 (UTC)

Looks a lot better. The "Early life" section needs an inline cite, so does the first paragraph of "Public service". Other than that, the article is a GA. Dabomb87 (talk) 22:24, 21 January 2009 (UTC)

Ok, done that. Thanks for all your efforts. Pleasure working with you. Mervyn Emrys (talk) 22:54, 21 January 2009 (UTC)

OK, a couple more things: The second paragraph of the Early life section needs an inline cite and http://www.ucowr.siu.edu/updates/pdf/Vii6_A5.pdf is a dead link (404 not found). Dabomb87 (talk) 23:00, 21 January 2009 (UTC)

Got them. Fixed link and all Early Life stuff is from same source, so moved it. Mervyn Emrys (talk) 00:40, 22 January 2009 (UTC)

OK, then the article passes GA. Congratulations! Dabomb87 (talk) 00:52, 22 January 2009 (UTC)

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An avid outdoorsman who suffered from asthma, Caulfield was also a horseman, advocating preservation of riding trails in the wooded parks of Washington, D.C. He kept a horse there, and at his home in Colorado until his death. Mervyn Emrys (talk) 22:56, 21 January 2009 (UTC)