Talk:Henry Probus/GA1
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Reviewer: DrKiernan (talk · contribs) 10:42, 7 September 2009 (UTC)
Prose: Article requires copyediting by a native english speaker.
Verifiability: Inline citations are preferred for statements which use weasel or peacock terms and statements that ascribe opinion, e.g. "a faithful subject", "a careful education", "reasonable suspicions", "febrile appeals", "some historians believe", etc. Balzer is cited as a source, but not listed in the references. The article self-contradicts itself, first saying that there is "reasonable suspicion" that Henry was a poet, and later saying that he was "a talented poet". The Death section needs individual sources for the different versions, dates and opinions.
Neutrality: wording such as the "the co-operation was exemplary" inadvertently appears to suggest that the invasion of Hungary by Poland was a good thing. This should be changed to avoid the appearance of bias while still highlighting the co-operation between the Slavic allies. "Fortunately for Henry...", the reaction of his allies to his imprisonment was indignant, but others were probably glad of it. Again, this should be changed to avoid presenting Henry's view as the view of the article. "again the good politics" and "generous in his triumph", "thanks to the betrayal of the Krakow townspeople" also presents a view that Henry's grab for power was desirable. User:DrKiernan (talk) 10:42, 7 September 2009 (UTC)