Talk:Hello Kitty (song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: My love is love (talk · contribs) 14:48, 20 September 2014 (UTC)

Lead

• "It was written by Lavigne, Chad Kroeger, David Hodges and Martin Johnson, while the song was produced by Kroeger and Hodges, with additional production by Brandon Paddock and Kyle Moorman." - Try to reword this sentence. It is very lengthy.
• Link music video, Billboard, Japanese culture, racist.

Background and composition

• Try to reword the sentence from the lead which is repeated here.
• Use "" instead of '' in the sentence 'Kawai' is Japanese for 'cute'.
• Link Japanese, Manga, Japanese video games, sexual euphemisms.

Critical reception

• Change Allmusic and MusicOMH to AllMusic and musicOMH.
• Mention the writer of The Michigan Daily.
• The last sentence in this section is unsourced. If you can't find a reliable source remove it.

Commercial performance

• "The song also surges to 5,000" - surged

Music video

• Instead of mentioning the day ("that Wednesday") use the date.
• Slant Magazine is not italicized.
• There is no source for The Independent review.
• The last paragraph of the Reception section has problems with close paraphrasing. Please try to reword it. I Am... ***D.D. 14:48, 20 September 2014 (UTC)

Live performances

• Try to expand this section with reviews, descriptions of the performances (if there are any reliable sources mentioning that).

All  Done except the live performances request, which I did not find reliable links for inclusion. Thank you for the review. Alex ^{talk page!} 10:41, 23 September 2014 (UTC)

Great job. Passing. I Am... ***D.D. 14:15, 23 September 2014 (UTC)