Talk:Glebe Dirty Reds/GA1

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Latest comment: 11 years ago by Bongomanrae in topic Move

GA Review edit

Lead
  • What does premiership refer to?
  Done MDM (talk) 03:58, 14 August 2008 (UTC)Reply
History
  • It opens with the club's first game. It misses out how, why and where the club were founded.
  Done, by adding another two paragraphs at the beginning of the history section, but I have a feeling they could be worded a little better. If you can, do you think you can help out there as I seem to be going around in circles every time I try and fix something. MDM (talk) 04:43, 14 August 2008 (UTC)Reply
  • "In 1910, the club had a mediocre season and had little chance of ever taking the premiership out." POV and unreferenced.
  Done MDM (talk) 04:55, 14 August 2008 (UTC)Reply
  • "The 1911 season was arguably the most successful in the club's history, taking out the minor premiership outright by two points and winning 11 of their 14 matches on the way including their first-ever victory over local rivals Balmain 41–2 in the second last regular-season match of the season." A long sentence, with too many themes going in. Consider splitting up.
  Done MDM (talk) 04:55, 14 August 2008 (UTC)Reply
  • "In round 4" should be "In round four" I think
  Done MDM (talk) 03:58, 14 August 2008 (UTC)Reply
  • "1913 and 1914 proved to be mediocre seasons for Glebe and despite winning more games than they lost in each year, the club only managed to finish fourth and fifth respectively." Don't start sentences with numbers. Also unreferenced and POV in this form.
  Done MDM (talk) 04:55, 14 August 2008 (UTC)Reply
It still starts with numbers. It's not good prose to start a sentence with a number, even if it does refer to a year. Peanut4 (talk) 22:15, 14 August 2008 (UTC)Reply
  • "In 1922, they finally managed another shot at the premiership with they and North Sydney finishing on equal points at the end of the season." I don't understand this. I think it should be "because they and North Sydney finished" or "when they ... finished"
  Done MDM (talk) 03:58, 14 August 2008 (UTC)Reply
  • What happened after expulsion?
  Done. MDM (talk) 05:12, 14 August 2008 (UTC)Reply
  • Make sure Glebe takes either singular or plural consistently. At the moment, there is a mixture.
  Not done Could you give an example of where is the case? Keep in mind that in the introduction, Glebe is referred to both as "Glebe" (plural, "Glebe were") and "the club" (singular, "the club was"). I thought it was okay to use both, although if you see it as a problem I will change it. MDM (talk) 05:12, 14 August 2008 (UTC)Reply
Colours
  • This is a very stubby section. If you expand the club's pre-league history and foundation, I reckon it would go there.
  Done MDM (talk) 04:55, 14 August 2008 (UTC)Reply
Statistics
  • "As an individual, Frank Burge holds all of Glebe's records." Is this strictly true. I doubt he holds every single record, however obscure you need to get.
  Not done There's simply not one major record at the club that he didn't hold. There isn't any notable record in the sport which hasn't been mentioned in that article, and in every instance he holds each and every one. MDM (talk) 05:12, 14 August 2008 (UTC)Reply
General
  • Numerals less than ten should be in words not figures per WP:MOSNUM.
  Done MDM (talk) 03:58, 14 August 2008 (UTC)Reply
  • Numerals and units should be broken by non-breaking spaces per WP:MOSNUM.
  Not done After a quick browse through the article, I can't seem to find any situations where that's relevant. MDM (talk) 03:58, 14 August 2008 (UTC)Reply
There's loads, e.g. 10 rounds, 14 matches and most of the statistics section. It doesn't have to be units in the broadest sense of the word. WP:MOSNUM explains why you need the non-breaking spaces. Peanut4 (talk) 22:14, 14 August 2008 (UTC)Reply

A bit to do, but nothing substantial. The main part is explaining how the club were founded. I'll put it on hold. Peanut4 (talk) 22:21, 13 August 2008 (UTC)Reply

GA review (see here for criteria)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  

Meets all the GA criteria. Well done. It could do with some images, but I guess that might be difficult on a club of this period. Peanut4 (talk) 20:32, 18 August 2008 (UTC)Reply


Move edit

To Glebe District Rugby League Football Club as that was the official name of the team. Bongomanrae (talk) 14:04, 2 September 2012 (UTC)Reply