Talk:Dogmeat (Fallout)/GA1
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Reviewer: Kung Fu Man (talk · contribs) 22:14, 10 November 2012 (UTC) Alright I'm going to spare you the breakdown and get right to the point: the prose is a mess and direly needs a copyedit. Reading the sentences aloud may help with that, as it'll give you an indication if things can be improved upon, or cases in which grammar is incorrect (for example, the first sentence of the reception area).
- I really feel a better picture can be used for the article. While I get the intended impact of the image, it's meaningless to someone unfamiliar with the game and doesn't give a good idea of Dogmeat's appearance, which is what the infobox image is intended for.
- Reference 9 can be rewritten to cover that it's discussing Dogmeat as an example of a non-human party member and the significance of it without namedropping an unrelated character or game (checked the exact excerpt myself on Google, this is feasible).
- The fan-made mod reference doesn't add a whole lot by itself. Many such mods exist across the board, how was Dogmeat's significant?
- Reference 12 is given undue weight: as broad a blanket term as to why such a character was chosen cannot and should not be used as qualifying reception. It needs to be more specific: why does it matter that he was on this poll in their opinion. If they were to, say, list 'pokemon' as an option, would that validate it as reception for every species article? No. In addition the results of the poll are user based and unreliable.
Really even with those points, the one thing holding it back is how it's written. The material is there but it's a difficult read and needs a little dusting. If this is done I have no problem promoting it to GA.--Kung Fu Man (talk) 22:14, 10 November 2012 (UTC)
You mean ref 10 right? What exactly there is hard to read? I thought it's pretty simple, well explained, and also short. Almost-winning the poll = being popular among the gamers. Dogmeat's look (and race) was different in FO1 (and 2). --Niemti (talk) 00:45, 12 November 2012 (UTC)
- You can still use a better image though. Use the article to discuss that the character appeared differently in different titles. As for the poll, the biggest problem is there's no control on the results: it's very easy for someone to use a script to spoof a poll's results, as has been illustrated by folks such as Stephen Colbert when he sought to have a bridge named after himself. And yes, ref 10; it can be worded to get to the point without needing to mention the Shadow of the Colossus character, no?--Kung Fu Man (talk) 04:40, 12 November 2012 (UTC)