Talk:Constitution of 3 May 1791/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Grandiose (talk · contribs) 16:27, 30 December 2011 (UTC)

Will be reviewing in full shortly, but look very promising. I imagine you're heading onto to FA with this one. Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 16:27, 30 December 2011 (UTC)

Some of the image licensing needs improving:

• commons:File:Stanislaw_malachowski.jpg, commons:File:Hugon Kołłątaj.PNG, and commons:File:Ignacy_Potocki_2.JPG all need information about the source of the image - who took the picture in question. I don't doubt that PD-ART applies to each, but a source is necessary for plagiarism and other purposes.

• Potocki's image replaced with a better one. For Kollataj, I added a similar source; I cannot find the exact source. For Malachowski, I found a hq image, and replaced the current one, noting the source (also, improved description). --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk to me} 14:46, 10 January 2012 (UTC)

Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 16:36, 30 December 2011 (UTC)

With regard to references:

• We have a page on Hugh Seton-Watson, although of course this is not a requirement.

• Linked. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk to me} 14:46, 10 January 2012 (UTC)

1. 51 is best removed as a tertiary and unneeded source.
   1. Fixed, as well as another to that source. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk to me} 14:46, 10 January 2012 (UTC)

Why are #60 and #74 to the same book, and in general, whilst others have page numbers? Can one be provided?

1. Typo in a template fixed, should display page numbers now. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk to me} 14:46, 10 January 2012 (UTC)

Consider (not a req.) adding a translated title to references such as #98 and #99.

1. Added. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk to me} 14:46, 10 January 2012 (UTC)

Could you also tidy the external links; nothing major. Bucki is used as a reference and may not be suitable. Nothing is particularly necessary, but it would be nice.

1. Bucki is really kept only for a translation, as the printed source has a fuller quote (but in Polish). --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk to me} 14:46, 10 January 2012 (UTC)

On prose:

1. "confederations - legal rebellions" ~ should be a dash (m-dashes used elsewhere);
   1. I don't know how to fix dashes. They have always been an arcane mystery to me. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk to me} 14:46, 10 January 2012 (UTC)
2. "Józef Massalski,"~ semicolon would work better;
   1. done. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk to me} 14:46, 10 January 2012 (UTC)
3. "The Enlightenment had gained great influence in certain Commonwealth circles during the reign" ~ I think if you dropped the first link in favour of the second, you could word it so as to be a lots less clumsy;
   1. Hmmm, ok. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk to me} 14:46, 10 January 2012 (UTC)
4. "eventually blot Poland from the map of Europe" ~ reword please to avoid the non-enyclopedic tone;
   1. Sounds good to me. Could you suggest a different wording? --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk to me} 14:46, 10 January 2012 (UTC)
5. Suggestion: "1770–71", "1761–1763" ~ inconsistent;
   1. Fixed.--_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk to me} 14:46, 10 January 2012 (UTC)
6. Suggestion: "3 May", "May 3" ~ inconsistent;
   1. Fixed. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk to me} 14:46, 10 January 2012 (UTC)
7. "What was left of the Commonwealth was merely a small buffer state with a puppet king and a Russian army." ~ reword or reference;
8. "[57] [58]" ~ space
   1. Fixed, I hope. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk to me} 15:07, 10 January 2012 (UTC)
9. " — " ~ should be unspaced in various places;
10. "May 3 constitution", "May 3rd constitution" ~ inconsistent;
    1. Fixed. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk to me} 15:07, 10 January 2012 (UTC)
11. "130[ref]-132[ref] senators" ~ can't work out if that's a hyphen, if it is, should be endash;
12. See if "Sejm" should be capitalised in some places it isn't;
    1. Fixed. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk to me} 15:07, 10 January 2012 (UTC)
13. "Some feminists might prefer "motherland."" ~ remove
    1. Fixed. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk to me} 15:07, 10 January 2012 (UTC)

No neutrality or stability issues.

On hold for 7 days. Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 17:10, 30 December 2011 (UTC)

I hope I fixed all but the dash issues, which I just can't grok. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk to me} 15:07, 10 January 2012 (UTC)

OK, think I got all the dash issues. I changed "blot" to "remove" – this reduces the melodrama. For the record, "blot from the map of Europe" sounds a bit like a rhetorical flourish. If you accept "remove" then I'll pass. Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 15:50, 10 January 2012 (UTC)

Sure. I tried for a bit more flowery language with blot, but I accept that I might have overdone it there. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk to me} 16:14, 10 January 2012 (UTC)