Talk:Late December 2012 North American storm complex/GA2

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Reviewer: Yellow Evan (talk · contribs) 20:44, 20 April 2013 (UTC)

• Have all the issues from the last GAN been addressed? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 20:44, 20 April 2013 (UTC)
• "The 2012 Christmas tornado outbreak was the largest tornado outbreak ever to occur in the United States on December 25. " May you please rewrite the thesis? It is trival IMO. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 20:44, 20 April 2013 (UTC)
• Why is there a source in the lead? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane}
• "which tracked for a total of 60.4 miles (97.2 km), damaged and destroyed various structures and downed many trees and power lines." don't link such common terms. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 20:44, 20 April 2013 (UTC)
• "The Mobile EF2 damaged many homes, businesses, a hospital, and a high school, with estimated damages ranging from $140 to $150 million." Two things: I'd move this to where your frist mention the mobile tornado, making something like " an EF2 that moved across areas of Mobile, Alabama, where it damages many homes and businesses, with estimated damages ranging from $140 to $150 million.". Also, how come there is no exact damage total? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane}
• "On December 24, the Storm Prediction Center (SPC) issued a moderate risk for severe storms, valid for the following day." where? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane}
• "The moderate risk covered an area stretching from west-central Louisiana to west-central Alabama.[3] The moderate risk was expanded south and west on December 25 to include cities such as Port Arthur, New Orleans, and Mobile.[4]" combine these two sentences. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 20:44, 20 April 2013 (UTC)
• "south-central Texas by 1200 UTC on December 25.[6]" IMO "on December 25" should be changed to "that day". YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 20:44, 20 April 2013 (UTC)
• "This EF3 tornado, tied for the strongest ever recorded on Christmas Day in the United States," with what tornado? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 20:44, 20 April 2013 (UTC)
• " One house in McNeill that was destroyed had survived effects from both Hurricane Camille and Hurricane Katrina. " IMO trival, so I suggest removal. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane}
• "The tornado entered Stone County west of Texas and caused " m readlink. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 20:44, 20 April 2013 (UTC)
• "The tornado tracked for 60.4 miles (97.2 km) across five counties and injured 12 people.[14]" m one sentence paragraph. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 20:44, 20 April 2013 (UTC)
• "Mobile, Alabama" why do you have the state name in the heading? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 20:44, 20 April 2013 (UTC)
• "The tornado widened to its widest point of 200 yards (180 m) in this area" abbreviate "yards" IMO. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 20:44, 20 April 2013 (UTC)
• "The tornado then weakened slightly (to high-end EF1/weak EF2) and damaged several more homes and blew windows at Mobile Infirmary Medical Center, a 500+ bed hospital on Springhill Avenue" what's the exact number? And why do you mention the streetname? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 20:44, 20 April 2013 (UTC)
• "A tornado emergency was issued for the tornado as it approached areas of Downtown Mobile at 5:00 PM CST (2300 UTC), stating Midtown Mobile, Downtown Mobile, and Prichard, Alabama as potentially affected areas.[19] " Please list UTC time first. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 20:44, 20 April 2013 (UTC)
• "

In Tioga, after another EF2 tornado, neighbors, friends, and family of victims aided in the cleanup across town. Many homes and other structures were damaged and there were many volunteers ready to help victims of the tornado. Power was out in the area for at least two days.[22]

A Cenla man partnered with the American Red Cross in an effort to raise at least $10,000 for storm victims across the area.[23]

" combine, these two paragraphs. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 20:44, 20 April 2013 (UTC)

Okay, after reading this article, it is kinda close to GA status, but could use some work. I'd get a copyeditor as some of the writing is very eh (I did not list some of the problems above). For this reason not to mention the above comments, I am going to fail this article. I'm sorry to say this and not trying to hurt anyone's feelings and by no means this is anything personal, but it just remindeds me of a lot of recent ATL retired/non-GA US landfalling storms, abliet better sourced. It's close and far at the same time. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 20:44, 20 April 2013 (UTC)