Talk:2010 Aaron's 499

Latest comment: 13 years ago by Nascar1996 in topic lead changes
Former good article nominee2010 Aaron's 499 was a Sports and recreation good articles nominee, but did not meet the good article criteria at the time. There may be suggestions below for improving the article. Once these issues have been addressed, the article can be renominated. Editors may also seek a reassessment of the decision if they believe there was a mistake.
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DateProcessResult
June 27, 2010Good article nomineeNot listed
Did You Know
A fact from this article appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the "Did you know?" column on May 3, 2010.
The text of the entry was: Did you know ... that Kevin Harvick broke a 115 race winless streak by winning the 2010 Aaron's 499?

GA Review

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Reviewer: Wizardman Operation Big Bear 03:01, 15 June 2010 (UTC) Overall, this is a pretty good article, but I have some concerns:Reply

  • "officials decided that they would change from the rear wing to the rear spoiler which debuted in the 2010 Goody's Fast Pain Relief 500." Can that be explained/linked? I'm not a racing expert so I dunno what rear wing/rear spoiler means.
  • "Also before the race, NASCAR made a competition caution, that was on lap 20." So was it before the race or on lap 20? I'm confused.
  • Perhaps instead of having it end with the race results, a new Aftermath section could be added, where it can note Harvick's streak being snapped and note any major movement in points changes.
  • In general, the prose is not all that good. Namely, the race summary is pretty much just "x took the lead on lap a, y retook the lead after lap b.." etc. Did other things happen in the race? Is there a way to perhaps modify how this section is written? I know you've had other GAs in this format before, but I don't know if I'm comfortable with that. I'm not sure how to explain it better than I had to push my way through reading the article since it felt repetitive with the language, even though racing is going to be difficult to write about for that very reason; it's very difficult to write about that without sounding like you're saying the same thing over and over.

I'll put the GA on hold; when things are fixed I'll look at the article again. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 03:01, 15 June 2010 (UTC)Reply

I'll sleep on the racing section and figure out a better way to write it all. Everything else is good, so once I figure it out it should make other articles easier for others to review as well. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 23:23, 15 June 2010 (UTC)Reply
Okay. --Nascar1996 16:43, 17 June 2010 (UTC)Reply
Once you figure a way to rewrite this I would also appy it to future ones; if you do anyway. --Nascar1996 (sign) 20:01, 18 June 2010 (UTC)Reply
I'm keeping an eye on Airplaneman's review of another one for right now; if he can come up with something then that will help big time with the rest of them, as you say. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 03:16, 19 June 2010 (UTC)Reply
It is very complicated. I would like your overall opinion on 2010 Heluva Good! Sour Cream Dips 400. Thanks. --Nascar1996 (sign) 03:19, 19 June 2010 (UTC)Reply

I think I figured it out. Basically I want the race section to flow better and be more captivating. Look through some of the F1 race articles (i.e. 2008 Italian Grand Prix) and see how they write them. Modify the article as such. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 18:00, 22 June 2010 (UTC)Reply

I believe I did that on 2010 Toyota/Save Mart 350. Would you see if I did? --Nascar1996 Go Jimmie Johnson 18:06, 22 June 2010 (UTC)Reply
Yup, that article looks much better. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 18:28, 22 June 2010 (UTC)Reply
Thank Gosh. How long will you give me to fix this article. --Nascar1996 Go Jimmie Johnson 19:09, 22 June 2010 (UTC)Reply
I'll check back at this on Friday. I'm closing the review at the end of the month one way or another. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 20:45, 22 June 2010 (UTC)Reply
I'll try to get this done by then, but I don't know if I will where a race is every Saturday or Sunday. I'm going to begin it today. --Nascar1996 Go Jimmie Johnson 21:31, 22 June 2010 (UTC)Reply

Also how do you think of the first paragrapgh since I reworded it? --Nascar1996 Go Jimmie Johnson 21:45, 22 June 2010 (UTC)Reply

Per request, I'm failing the article as a GA. It was getting there, so it's too bad. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 17:00, 27 June 2010 (UTC)Reply

lead changes

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This page says 89 lead changes, the sprint cup series page says 88. Which is it? --24.94.251.190 (talk) 22:13, 23 February 2011 (UTC)Reply

It was 88. Thanks for pointing that out. Nascar1996 22:27, 23 February 2011 (UTC)Reply